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May 12, 2005
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Crazy for you when the day ends
Crazy for you when the night descends
Crazy for you when the morning shows
My fire for you forever glows

Aching for you endlessly
Aching, waiting, dauntlessly
Aching for you, it drives me insane
When will this pain of mine wane?

Iím waiting for you, oh when will you see?
Iím waiting for you, youíre the one for me
Iím waiting for you, come to me please
My mindís buzzing like a hive of bees

Iíll love you, even if youíre unaware
Iíll love you, and Iíll hope that that you share
Iíll love you, just turn around
Pick me up from the ground
Where I fell so hard, after falling for you.  
Wow - I've actually submitted a structured poem. This is a change, as I usually don't restrict myself to a pattern, but hey - it's good to be diverse. I wanted to express, in this poem, that feeling of frustration you get when you really like someone who doesn't seem to realise your efforts - the feeling can tear some people apart inside. It's painful emotionally and it can be so draining, and it seems like all the effort and waiting in the world will not ever be enough. It's enough to drive anyone completely insane (not literally).
kirbena Featured By Owner May 13, 2005
Wow...very nice. :3 *pokes her playfully* I think this is your best poem, yet! XP Maybe it's because it's "structured" as you say. XD;;
But, yeah. That was really nice. ^^ :+fav:
Striderknight Featured By Owner May 12, 2005
...Say, what inspired you to make this poem?
TheShroudedOne91 Featured By Owner May 13, 2005
It's something kinda personal... and hard to explain... *hesitates*
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